wiki leaks responce

Yazen began by stating and informing the reader on what he thought and his opinion the side that he stood on. Yazen's point on the topic was clear since the begging, but what was it that he was stating and defending? there was not a true introduction to his claims that ended up hooking a person. without the hook and enough information for a reader to understand it was unclear what was the purpose for what yazen was backing up and defending. those critical things are necessary to make a debate strong, and to end up persuading a reader and a person on the opposite side. while their was some backgound information missing the way that words and voice that the infomation was in a way informal. the language in which the dabate was introduced was unprofessional in many points. Such thing included things as "Yeah, so what." "gonna" "wanna" when a paper begins to move and drift into a direction with words it leads to some people and the reader confused in the way where they may not understand the points they are giving.

Too start this debate off, Wiki-Leaks hasn't truly done anything wrong. Yeah, so what. Wiki-leaks released never before seen footage of hidden government documents that a couple of white men in suits hid from the people of United States. If there is gonna be an achievement for peace, not one person can be above the law. If we ever wanna learn how to be come an independent and wise nation......................................................................................................... and to do this:

We must first start with putting our trust into our people. Hiding the truth from the state is like den eying there freedom.

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Don't' even get me started on the arrest of Julian Assange founder of WikiLeaks. He unlike others, trully served his purpose and service to this country more than any other "solider" has.

the ending points can be changed in not ending with a questions and a way where in a way it led into a new topic, and drifted. the way where t ended made the post less persuasive.


overall the points that were given in the opening statement were clear and was persuasive leading to the reader wondering at points and wanting to learn more and new information. with a few small changes at points it can make the post a bit more persuasive and to make more sense.